Post by ania on Oct 14, 2006 17:01:09 GMT -5
an excerpt from my book. This is the bit where we first meet Ania. It desperately needs revising because it's not up to my standards.
He smiled as there was a quiet knock on the door and it opened. The face of a girl a few years older than myself peered through the cracked door. She smiled, walked in, and gently shut the door behind her. "There she is. Our lake nymph." she said quietly as she crossed to stand in front of me. She had waist-length chestnut hair which was kept in a braid and wore a v-neck green dress which was the same ivy shade as her eyes. Her skin was much paler than Ann or Thomas' and her features seemed sharp compared to those on their smooth, rounded faces.
She grinned and asked, "Did I come in time to save you from touring the town with him?" She nodded to Thomas who had gone to stand beside her. I gave a small smile and nodded. "Good, because my version is much more interesting. With him you'd be given a basic overview of where things were and introduced to people as time went by. With me we're going to poke around in other people's houses and shops, and meet so many people in so little time that there's no possible way you'll remember their names." she babbled with another grin before adding, "I'm Ania." I gave a shy smile. She turned to Thomas and asked, "Is she a mute?" Thomas smiled gently and said, "No, she just can't get a word in edgewise." Ania looked guilty and bit her lip. "Sorry." she murmured.
He smiled as there was a quiet knock on the door and it opened. The face of a girl a few years older than myself peered through the cracked door. She smiled, walked in, and gently shut the door behind her. "There she is. Our lake nymph." she said quietly as she crossed to stand in front of me. She had waist-length chestnut hair which was kept in a braid and wore a v-neck green dress which was the same ivy shade as her eyes. Her skin was much paler than Ann or Thomas' and her features seemed sharp compared to those on their smooth, rounded faces.
She grinned and asked, "Did I come in time to save you from touring the town with him?" She nodded to Thomas who had gone to stand beside her. I gave a small smile and nodded. "Good, because my version is much more interesting. With him you'd be given a basic overview of where things were and introduced to people as time went by. With me we're going to poke around in other people's houses and shops, and meet so many people in so little time that there's no possible way you'll remember their names." she babbled with another grin before adding, "I'm Ania." I gave a shy smile. She turned to Thomas and asked, "Is she a mute?" Thomas smiled gently and said, "No, she just can't get a word in edgewise." Ania looked guilty and bit her lip. "Sorry." she murmured.